Sevenling(I Board My Wooden Bark)

I board my wooden barque yet again

For my quotidian trip

Down the Susqehanna.

 

 

In the distance I see the Pocono Mountains.

On the shoreline I see the man with the shaky hands.

He recoils in horror at the sight of three rocks.

 

 

The sky often gets so dark and cloudy.

 

 

The elements of the Sevenling are:
1. a heptastich, a poem in 7 lines made up of 2 tercets followed by a single line. metered at the discretion of the poet.
2. unrhymed.
4. composed with 3 complimentary images in the first tercet and 3 parallel images in the second tercet. The end line is a juxtaposed summary of the 2 parallels, a sort of “punchline”.
5. the poem should be titled “Sevenling: (first few words of poem).

 

 

I got this idea, to try to write a SEVENLING , from Kat Myrman.

 

5 thoughts on “Sevenling(I Board My Wooden Bark)

  1. Kat Myrman says:

    Very nice Larry. I love the flowery words of the first stanza and the mundane of the second. (though I am a bit alarmed by the man’s horror of three rocks…) and the final line…perfection. I’m still trying to work this form out. Several more weeks to give it a go. 🙂

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    1. larry trasciatti says:

      Thanks Kat. A while ago, Coal Black complained that I was afflicted with a lack of symbolism, which is what qualifies a poem as a poem in the first place. I’ve been trying to take advantage of all the symbolism I’ve soaked up over the years.

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      1. Kat Myrman says:

        I would say you mastered it in this one. There was plenty of symbolism there. I do love it when poets name a thing in full. It may date the poem, but in some cases, I think that is precisely the point of it.

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