‘Twas many a year ago, Sir, you see,
I met with my horrible dreaded fate,
A fate that could only transpire at sea.
True love, I now know, was not meant for me.
A lesson I learned, alas, far too late.
Alas our marriage was not meant to be.
I did love my lovely, gentle Marie
With a love that did her consecrate.
She returned not the same true love for me.
On a dark night in November, you see,
This horrid tale I now sadly narrate.
My fair damsel did, sadly, betray me.
My heart is now broken to a great degree,
I am so sadly now bound here to state.
Of true happiness I am forever free.
I wander throughout the dolorous sea.
For my broken heart it is far too late.
Our true love was not ever meant to be.
Here is my attempt at a villanelle, which strikes me as quite awkward, considering that I have no practice. I’m really trying to get involved with dVerse Poets Pub . I used Dylan Thomas’ ‘Do Not Go Gentle Into That Dark Night’ as my model. Please add yours to Mr. Linky
What a sad tale. Glad to see you at dVerse. It’s a very good place to learn about poetry. Larry, are you adding your poems to Mr. Linky?
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Thanks for reminding me
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You are welcome.
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I’ve just added it to Mr. Linky
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Sad indeed. Thanks for joining!
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Wha a tragedy indeed. I enjoyed the story of the sad life. Thanks for joining in.
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Thanks
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Please take the time to visit and comment on other poems at Mr. Linky. This is part of joining in our dVerse community. See you!
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I’ve been reading them, and I’m trying to think of some comments
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I’ve read your poem about rain. It’s really good, but I’ve never seen the word ‘river’ used as a verb before
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I enjoy narrative poetry very much. Thank you for sharing yours.
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Nice line: “Of true happiness I am forever free”
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How sad, but a beautiful poem! I am here but always learning and ever awkward. No one berates me for it and I feel it to be a safe and inspiring place.
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Thanks. It’s good to know that no one messes with the amateurs, exactly because there must be so very many of us
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I’m a few months new to the dVerse gang: welcome! It’s a great group to grow your poetry skills in, and villanelles are notoriously tough.
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Thanks. I’ve been noticing how nice it is. I’ve only very rarely been here until recently
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Ah, heartbreak at sea is such a romantic (and sad) tale. I need to push myself to try a villanelle; thank you for inspiring me!
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Thanks for the comment
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Oh this is heartwrenchingly beautiful!
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Thanks
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Definitely a tragedy!
I used the same Dylan poem as my reference..
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Thanks It always pays to follow good models
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Props for trying a new form! We aren’t growing as artists if we don’t push our limits, right?
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Thanks Yes the best way to get better is to be at least a little brave
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Well, the old-fashioned language seems to fit this tale.
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What a sad piece. It tugs at the heart. Makes me want to revisit my own poetry writing. It seems like so long since I’ve done any. Well done! What is Mr. Linky?
God bless…
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Mr. Linky is a link many people use to organize their posts for keeping track of them.
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Oh, thank you very much for the information. That could be very helpful.
God bless…
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I am very sorry for that which happened to you; I wish that I could say more. Thanks for your like of my post on John 1:1-5; you are very kind.
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