forgetful elmer

parked

“It’s such a bright sunny day, we could be having the time of our lives, but we’re stuck in some Wilkes Barre shopping center parking lot because you drove without your glasses!”, shrieked Sadie. Elmer cringed, feeling stupid.
They both paced restlessly throughout the parking lot of the Hub, waiting for help. She was trying so hard to be so patient and understanding but his absent mindedness drove her crazy. “I’ve never gotten into an accident with a fireman before,” he stammered. “There’s a first time for everything,” she said. “Try thinking straight for the first time.”

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15 comments

  1. Is Elmer related to Quincy Magoo? Sadie is a bit of a Debbie Downer, isn’t she?
    Just a small suggestion. Break your dialogue into separate paragraphs (his & hers). I stumbled a little toward the end when I first read it. Breaking that up would clarify who’s speaking for the reader.

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